Picture It and Write, Sept.15,2012

The wickedly beautiful young lady admired herself in her poisonous mirror. Thoughts of how no other could be as beautiful as she, were the thoughts that ran through her mind. She had always been praised by her parents of her beauty and her smarts growing up. Her parents wanted to encourage her out of her shyness as a young child, so they filled her mind with their own desires of their hearts.

She did come out of her shell, and once the clam jaws were opened they sucked in the innocence of young men, anxious to fulfill their adolescent  minds and wondering eyes. Once she even lured with her natural bait, the married man who lived in the next block down from her house.

What was to be a promotion from shyness to acceptance, ended up being sucked into the soul, as if the devil’s breath was breathing heavily into her. She walked with her head too high, she chose beauty, and power over school books and learning. By the time she was 16 years of young age, she walked away from the school doors, never to return again.

Her life was wasted, never leaving anything on this earth but a black mark on the sidewalk, where the cops found her dead body, showing evidence of her neck being sliced. She laid there alone, life seeping out of her veins, dying alone.

The moral of this story is that your outer beauty is only the peeling of the apple. What hides in the inner core, is who the person really represents. When we believe that there is no one better than us, along comes a spider and traps you in their web, replacing your thoughts with theirs.


26 thoughts on “Picture It and Write, Sept.15,2012

  1. Appearances can be deceiving, but this also doesn’t mean that all beautiful people are corrupt within. One should just never judge someone by their looks. Thanks for contributing this week to Picture it & write!

    – Ermisenda


  2. I want this to be a loving comment and not a mean one, so I hope you take it that way, Terry. I want you to keep growing. I’ve seen great improvements from the things others have said about your work and then seen a sort of resting on laurels.

    Please keep trying to get better. Don’t rest.

    There are some of us who have ideas. Some of us who can write. Some of us who are gifted with both. Some of us who are just readers.

    It gets blunt here.

    You are gifted with great ideas. Please keep trying to make them more readable. Please!? You have a great gift. Make it grammatically correct and poetically enticing so that millions can enjoy it. Please? ♥

    It’s what you should do if you are given such a magnificent gift.


      • Don’t ever be sorry for speaking. I looked up grammar, and I will try harder to work on this. I am a person who loves to write, and I never want my reading to be difficult or to a place someone would have to look up the meaning of a word. I write for enjoyment, comfort, and fading days. I appreciate your input. Don’t be sorry, please. Comprehension is one of my disabilities to a point, story telling was always hell in all my years of schooling. Maybe this is why I write so simple. I can not change who I am when I write, but I can watch common grammars better. thank you!!!! The compliment that you gave me having a gift is the highest compliment I have ever received. thank u very much


    • it is a writing exercise. i am to use my imagination for this purpose. my writings are not usually this way……………..but this is true life, and sometimes there are lessons in life for others to learn. thank goodness you and i have our crap together!!!! lol


      • I know ….. but I would had like a little happier end. Don’t like to read about unhappy things … life has enough of it. So sick of all unhappiness, problems, violence, abuse and evilness around us. I know you only write what you feel and shit far too often to young people in reality. Only me that want the world to be a better place … Not your fault – you should write what you feels right.


      • *smile … good, I will read it at once – only me that is me in a funny mood today. Yes, a bit feed up with all bad news and no good ones …


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