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He had almost lost her
Lost her forever
To an uncontrollable force
Where he had no control.
He was sleeping
She was in slumber
It sneaked in with a vengance
It woke her with trembling.
Screams came from within
Deep in her loins
Fear took over
Freezing her in mind.
A call from a neighbor
Who was startled a wake
Soon the block was lit up
Light bursting as day.
Men breaking glass
Ripping holes in the roof
Ladders were erected
She was rescued.
Terry Shepherd
01/27/2013
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This is extremely good!
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thank you so much Deana
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Wonderful imagery!
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thank u Julie!
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Hi Terry,
This is great wordplay. I however remain intrigued by the aspect of ” uncontrollable force” envisaged by you.
Shakti
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there was a house fire
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I am also curious about the “uncontrollable force” you wrote about. I loved the action you wove into the story at the end. I was a little dissapointed that the poem ended so abruptly. You had me hanging on to the story and what was to happen! 😛 Thanks for contributing this week. 🙂
– Ermisenda
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my thought was for the reader to think, with the abrupt ending. it was a house fire
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Terry, you truly know how to use words … *smile
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thank you Viveka!
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I like it! Especially how the fire “sneaked in with a vengance”.
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thank you so much Anne!
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You painted such a picture with your words!! Amazing!!
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thanks so much Barb!!!!!!! i love it when we get to chat!
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Nicely done!
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thank you so much. It is great to see you again!!
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Very concise and descriptive. I thought it was a fire, so I’m glad I guessed right.
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powerful
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